Cold shoulders

This silence is cold
a state of hypothermia
a phenomena of frost
on bitten fingertips,
now twice shy,
paralysed by this freeze –
I dont know why
I can’t warm
my underdressed shoulders
or where is my coat
with silver linings?
I feel a shiver
where I need your breath
to break the iciness
of this abyss.
This silence
has cold shoulders

….

Featured image by: Rafal Mazur

107 thoughts on “Cold shoulders

    1. Ahh Drew!!!! You have NO IDEA how much I’m smiling to see this comment from you. I really need to post more often, just so I can get to find out if you’re ok. Muchos besos mi amigo. You know my thoughts are with you ❤️❤️

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      1. So so sorry. I have stayed away from the blog and emails. Just too too many. I am resting big time.

        Feeling okay. The proceudre was successful and unsuccessful. I’m waiting for my insurance to approve a five day a wek, seven week heart therapy that will strenghten my heart.

        This is the first only only post I have ready in these two weeks. Not ready for the pressure of the heavy blog reading and replying to comments. It will take more time for that.

        Regarding your poem, “I feel a shiver where i need your breath.” gorgeous lines, definitely my favorites. Feels good to read you. Almost like I coming home again.

        I will return. I rub your warm words and and sweet thoughts against my chest.
        Please stay safe and be well. ❤️❤️

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      2. I completely understand how overwhelming it must be to blog or comment or reply to people – you are widely loved, I can imagine you’re inundated. I am so happy to hear you are putting yourself first and doing what you need. I am hoping that the surgery was more on the successful than the unsuccessful side… and that your insurance will approve the care you need. I’m crossing every finger and toe that I can.

        Drew, I am so so happy to hear from you, thank you for responding, not to mention your beautiful words about my poem. I’m glad to know my words are a kind of poetic ointment or balm. I hope they’re healing to you. My thoughts are with you xoxoxo 😘

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  1. Your words sent a shiver down my spine….. winter has started with a blast from the past here…. and my heater’s on….. this is chilling…
    “a phenomena of frost
    on bitten fingertips,
    now twice shy,”

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    1. I know what you mean about winter Ivor, to be honest, I wouldn’t mind giving it the cold shoulder for a bit longer.

      I’m so happy you’ve enjoyed the poem, and those lines in particular. Keep warm my fellow ‘south of the equator’ friend ❤️

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  2. The first thing I notice
    are the strong central lines…

    ‘i can’t warm/ my undressed shoulders’

    cloaked on both sides by such cold imagery.
    A really well dressed poem, Rachel.

    (IMO)
    IM&O/peace
    xo

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  3. Take shelter in the silent cold.
    The world shrieks as fires consume
    and anger boils,
    fanned by insanity
    and hot winds of hate.
    A spark
    without care
    without need
    took the last breath of a man
    and with that breath
    fanned to life
    flames,
    flames that burn
    the foundations of righteous anger
    and solidarity
    reducing all to coals and ash
    that will erupt
    with the next
    needless
    selfish
    spark

    Where is the silver lining?

    We’re all in the same abyss, we need warm hearts and cool heads.

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    1. Wow Tim, this is breathtaking – I feel engulfed in the flames of this terrible and raging fire you describe, the type that burns humanity. Such masterful writing Tim. I hope you will post this.

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  4. I was talking to someone earlier in the day about the protests and rioting that is happening here and in other countries. I support the protests and expression of outrage over the needless death of a man and the callous disregard for his life by the killer and witnesses who could have helped, but chose not to. What I don’t understand is what makes some people think that it’s okay to destroy property and hurt others, who just happen to be in the vicinity of the protest, just because they are angry. I don’t understand how law enforcement and the people making decisions and giving the orders choose to feed the anger instead of working to de-escalate the tension.
    I was going to write something completely different but that came out instead.
    You always get me going. Thank you, sorry, both.

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    1. Tim, it is me that should thank you. I think that your poem was on the brink of being written, it comes from your heart and your belief about what is right and how people should be treated. It was filled with fire, literally and metaphorically. The situation with the riots is so devastating and heartbreaking on many levels and your poem speaks to that.

      I’m glad that reading my poem was the catalyst for your poem evolving itself but I certainly can claim no credit for it – that poem had a life and soul of its own. I am honoured you posted it on my site though, I haven’t seen it on yours yet, so get cracking 😉. Thank you Tim.

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      1. to discuss rose tinted glasses in comments would be sheer injustice, they deserve a full blown ESP post

        but that doesnt mean you cant wear them with the coat and post a selfie, it might serve as an inspiration for the upcoming post.

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  5. The twice shy bitten fingertips that now must think twice to write to the one or touch them, the coat of silver linings lost leaving a metaphor of hope, and then this…’I feel a shiver
    where I need your breath’… I often see people saying that they were moved to tears upon reading something and I could never truly relate… You got me with this one, Rachel. Big time.
    I spent last night listening to a beautiful, haunting version of the operatic Cold Song, and somehow the title here spoke to me.
    The coherence of the title with the theme of silence, the dark and beautiful setting, the metaphors that touch in all the right places and images that linger within… I don’t even know what to say… ❤

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    1. … and I don’t even know what to say dear Isha. “The twice shy bitten fingertips that now must think twice to write to the one or touch them” – that is EXACTLY what I was trying to convey. That feeling when you are truly read by someone, and they truly feel your words, that is the best feeling you can ask for writing poetry (at least according to me). You give me this rare gift Isha. You feel words and that’s what makes you such a talented writer – and insightful reader. I am feeling shivers from your beautiful response to this poem. Thank you ❤️💜

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      1. Hugs to drive away those shivers, dear Rachel, although these ones are the good sort! I hope we meet someday. You’re such an artist and you’ll definitely be a universally loved one when you publish (if you haven’t already)! Poetry like yours is rare… You’re very gifted to be able to move people!

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      2. Isha, I can’t believe I missed this beautiful comment. You make me feel a little giddy with your praise, you have quickly become a treasure and a friend here. I can’t thank you enough. Love to you, and I hope you are having a wonderful day 😘

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  6. This is splendid my dearest Rachel. I’ll take that cold from you and each word of yours. All of them are splendid.

    “a phenomena of frost
    on bitten fingertips,”
    Tell me that I am dreaming. This is breathtaking. Rachel, I wonder sometimes if you understand how talented you are.

    “I dont know why
    I can’t warm
    my underdressed shoulders
    or where is my coat
    with silver linings?

    Is this you? I know it’s you. It’s your UNMISTAKABLE TALENT and your search for that one love…

    “This silence
    has cold shoulders”

    It may. But your soul shines. And you deserve all the love and the warmth in the world.
    I am sending as much as I can towards you: The Poetess of my Heart.
    Forever yours
    G.

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    1. Can you, please take some cold… I give it gladly. But I’ll at least give it to you it with
      1. some gloves
      2. a woolly hat
      3. a mug of cocoa
      4. a fire to sit beside and comfy chair to sit on
      5. A view to look at, perhaps snow and mountains or a stormy sea, your choice.
      6. A good book
      7. A whole tonne of love and definitely only the kind of silence that is heavenly, because you will not be cold at all.
      8. Chocolates, – belgian, milk, hazelnut centres.

      You are not dreaming. And yes, this is me, at least I think so 😂?

      You, are my poetess of the heart.
      Xoxoxo

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      1. You are an angel Rachel. I said that before. I have to say it many times so you will understand. Thank you for all these beautiful offers. Everything sounds divine.
        I don’t think I got an answer to my question.
        Rachel: do you understand how great you are sweetheart? Perhaps it is not you that should understand. It is us, your readers, that should.
        I do understand and most of the time I am speechless in front of your talent.
        xoxoxoxo

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      2. This question – I don’t know the answer dear G. That is the honest truth. But i will say that your encouragement means the world. Because I respect your writing and friendship so much, that kind of praise carries serious weight. You make me speechless and give me flurries of words all the time. Huge hugs honey 😘❤️💕🌸🐚🥀

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      3. See, you keep that talent of yours for yourself, like you keep your all other talents – can you send me another panting when you have time? – and I feel it’s unfair for the world. Shadows… one day the sun will shine in every corner and we will all enjoy the beauty of you talents. I’m patient Rachel. I can wait.

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      4. Aww G, I don’t know what to say. I feel like saying I’m sorry. I don’t feel I hold talents back. In some ways I wish I did feel that way. Mostly I try to protect myself from feeling I will disappoint others by posting something substandard. I haven’t been painting much lately, hopefully I will again soon.
        You are a sweetheart. Thank you for being you ❤️

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      5. Why are you thinking yourselves lesser than others,dear Rachel.whatever you write that is symbol of your talent.don’t loose hope.in womb of fututre,many gems are hidden for you,my dear!!

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  7. Aww G, I don’t know what to say. I feel like saying I’m sorry. I don’t feel I hold talents back. In some ways I wish I did feel that way. Mostly I try to protect myself from feeling I will disappoint others by posting something substandard. I haven’t been painting much lately, hopefully I will again soon.

    You are a sweetheart. Thank you for being you ❤️

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  8. Rachel, this is a perfect example of why I love to read your words/poems! You are such a master at weaving words together and hiding things in-between the lines and in the shadows. Such a
    wonderfully wistful and wondering feel. This made my mind imagine the panning of a movie camera and beautiful music in the background as your recite the words!! Mmm! A delightful read, My Dear!
    Especially loved your lines:
    a phenomena of frost
    on bitten fingertips, . . . .
    and
    I feel a shiver
    where I need your breath
    to break the iciness
    of this abyss.
    Such beautiful examples of the beauty and elegance of your words and emotions slightly revealed!! I agree with G’s comment above – I too don’t think you know the beauty and talent of your words, because I wonder if you know and can see the beauty of your heart and soul!! That’s why we need to tell you and remind you just how awesome You and your words are! Rachel, we are craving more of your moving and magical words to brighten our days!!
    Be safe and healthy, My Dear!!
    Chuck
    xoxo
    😘💕🌹

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    1. Chuck, if you’re not careful I’m going to start believing some of these things you say! 😂 You have been such a supportive presence on here lately, I am very grateful for your appreciation of my writing. You are a giving and generous soul, thank you so much!
      xoxo

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      1. Ok, Rachel!! I guess you are going to have to help me know what it is I have to do or say that will help
        you believe that what I tell you is true?? I know I’m not the only one who tells you this??? I do hope you will start believing me, My Dear!!! They are true – I’m The Reluctant Poet – Not You!! LOL! 😁😁Believe! I am delighted to be supportive of You and your writing. I’m just telling you what my heart and I believe and know is true about You and your writing!! I’m a cheerleader!! Have you forgotten???

        I hope that you had a great, long weekend and are all refreshed and your week is going well. I’m guessing it will be TGIF for you by the time you read this!! I’m hoping you are feeling more inspired to write soon. Is it ok if I send you a few temptations every now and then??? Ha! Since You are so busy I will relieve you of reading my older work, unless you insist on begging me, as I know your time is precious and I would rather you spend it writing your own pieces or maybe be tempted to write with me????

        I do so appreciate all the lovely and sweet comments you leave on my blog – They make my day, Rachel!!!
        Be safe, be happy
        Sunshine and Smiles
        Chuck
        xoxo
        😘💕🌹

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      2. Well, alright then, Rachel? A little tug of war? Just not pistols and swords? Nothing violent that might embarrass me! Ha! I can’t let you have it though because we are working on you not being reluctant and not having the slightest thought of anything you write, paint or anything else be substandard or not worthy!! You would never!! Your work is all excellent and all of us who read and support your blog know that from reading and just instinctively about You!!

        Happy to hear you had a fun time! Anything memorable or just chilling? And what about your painting?? No info? Can I tempt you for a few photos of your work? Please?

        Friday is going great!! Hope you have a delightful Saturday, My Dear!!
        Wishing You Sunshine and Smiles
        Chuck
        xoxo
        😘💕🌹

        How about these? Said Chuck, as he tried to tempt Rachel?

        If
        I Whispered

        #2
        When
        I Remember

        #3
        He
        Wistfully Wondered

        #4
        When
        I Pretend

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      3. Sounds like a wonderful time and location – Hope you were expecting cold and planned for it? NZ has a really great range of geography! I was teasing you, Rachel, not meaning to push or pressure! If you can ok otherwise let it go.
        Hope your weekend is going great too
        Chuck
        xoxo
        💕😘🌹

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  9. Beautiful Rachel, quite lovely…the images you’ve created, the feelings you have extended, I could feel the cold, the wind…I loved this poem and it’s strength and artistic expression. All the best and my greetings to you from Spain, hoping to send some warm rays of our bright sun, as it is quite hot here now…
    Take good care,
    Francisco

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    1. Thank you Francisco, that ray of Mediterranean sun brings a smile to my face. I may just bask in it a little. I wonder if I could take it to a cloudy wintry beach with me? Appreciate your lovely words, thanks always.

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      1. Absolutely Rachel, let that little ray go with you to that wintry beach and let it warm your face…lovely words come easy when talking about your lovely poetry, your powerful emotions and your art. Loved it! Take good care and all the best,
        Francisco

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      2. No, not in the water yet…I’m sort of like a cat, I love to be close to the sea and look at the water, I am not too crazy about going in…but I do! Thank you Rachel, today, another scorching day here in the Mediterranean! All the best,
        Francisco

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  10. “Where is my coat with silver linings” Oh my God. I adore this so much. The last lines sounded like the poem was addressing a lost loved one (not necessarily by death). But, for me, I felt like it symbolised numbness. Nothing ever warms you.

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    1. Nour, gosh, your interpretations of my poetry never fail to astound me – they feel like little gifts “I felt like it symbolised numbness. Nothing ever warms you.” I hadn’t thought of the word numbness, but it is perfect. Just perfect, yes, that is a wonderful description of the poem. Thank you dear friend ❤️

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  11. Stunning, just stunning poem. The coldness and icy nature has been surrounded by mirrors and you see the frost flurrying and swirling, slowly swerving out of sight and site. Beautiful.

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  12. Did I give cold shoulder to this piece? Gosh, I am guilty, Rachel! I don’t know how I missed this!
    Such incredible lines and clever use of phrases!
    Sending you heaps of warmth, my dearest friend. ❤️❤️
    (I think I should book my signed copy in advance!) ❤️

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    1. Awww sweetheart, no!!! I have never felt anything but warmth from your shoulders! I have been so sporadic on here, I worry it’s me doing that to you.

      Thank you for your support and encouragement, always. ❤️❤️

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  13. Rachel this is so lovely, every line. I don’t know how I missed this one. I can see all the beautiful visuals you paint with your words. “I feel a shiver where I need your breath
    to break the iciness of this abyss.” Gorgeous poetry my friend. Hope you are having a great day. Love and hugs Joni

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    1. My dear Joni. Thank you so much. Your poems always have such beautiful imagery so this is the highest compliment! I have been busy, and feel terrible for falling behind with reading and comments on here. I treasure your words, thank you so much. Sending love and happiness xoxo

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      1. It was my pleasure Rachel this poem I read a few times as it was so beautifully expressive. I hope you have an amazing week my friend. Love to you from NC. ❤️💕Joni

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  14. Beautiful and stunning imagery Rachel.

    As I was reading I felt a cold shivering feeling on my arms, but, its the sense of how your words grip the reader and capture the world you created in which someday I want to live in that planet of yours. 🙂

    I miss reading your work my friend. How are you feeling?

    I’m back and posted something new. 🙂

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    1. I’m happy to inhabit the same planet and often a shared wavelength with you Charlie. I’ve missed you terribly, I was so glad to see you’ve posted, and your poem was brilliant (I left a comment). Thank you always for your kind words and friendship.
      I’m feeling ok thank you, but have been very quiet on WordPress. Needed a bit of a chance to focus on work, family, life etc. How have you been? xoxo

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      1. Awww…I missed you too as well. 🙂

        Your friendship I always cherish and respect you so very much. You are such a talented and brilliant writer that I look up to and feel inspired.

        Focusing on work, family and life is the best medicine. Sometimes a break from WordPress is fine and we are all still here and are not going anywhere. 🙂

        I’ve been good. Just taking it easy and focusing on writing, listening to a ton of music, reading, spending time with family and my girlfriend and here and there work out here at home.

        Hope you have been listening to a lot of music and keeping yourself productive. 🙂

        Bless you my friend.

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      2. Speaking of inspiring, have you looked in the mirror any time lately? I find your work incredibly inspiring Charlie.
        You’re right, sometimes we need to focus on the world right in front of us. I don’t know what’s wrong with me at the moment, but I just don’t feel like things are ‘normal’. I guess the state of the world is anything but…

        So happy you’ve been taking it easy – it sounds like you have what matters in good order of priority. It warms my heart.

        I’ve been listening to a lot of music too, a big range of stuff, a lot of classical lately. But, here is an old fave of mine:

        (The xx – crystallized)

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      3. I don’t know what or how you are feeling at the moment. It is normal to feel as just. Trust me, I get into those moments where I don’t know what is wrong with me at times…the feeling is deep and its messing with the energy all around and the mood. You are not along my friend.

        I love and enjoy ‘The XX’. Great song.

        Here’s another one for you:

        Jon Secada Just Another Day ( Without You )

        An old school 90’s hit. Awesome song.

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