Hemispheres

I read your spring
while autumn leaves
make skeletons
that flutter in the branches
of my lungs
I’m left so hungry
for the taste of
long gone Easters,
the crinkled wrappers
I breathed in –
the burnt out wishes
of the cinnamon
and colours charred
compared to yesterday
it seems
there’s an empty
space among
the falling leaves
but my comfort is
the snowdrops that you
gift to me
When I read your Spring

I wrote this poem in response to a prompt from a dear friend and immensely talented writer, Gabriela from Short Prose fiction Link here, who transports me with her words. Through time, seasons, history, passion and emotions. If you haven’t read her poetry, you truly are missing out on something indescribably beautiful. I highly recommend her recently published book Passions, Love Poems and Other Writings. I have been unable to put it down since I got it.

Featured artwork: Edith Rewa Barrett

90 thoughts on “Hemispheres

  1. Ah, Rachel, what a delightful surprise to find right before my beddy time.

    my comfort is
    the snowdrops that you
    gift to me
    When I read your Spring

    We like to talk about your beginnings and my endings. You nailed this one my dear. It was the perfect ending for this wonderful piece.
    You know I like it for it features two of the things I adore most- love and longing.

    Beautifully done.
    Hope you are having a wonderful day so far.
    ❤️

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    1. You really are too kind, I mean that. I struggled with this ending, as I do all of them. Your encouragement and support means the world though, and I’m pleased you see the love and longing within it. There was plenty of that. The ache especially.

      Hope you’ve had a wonderful day too.
      ❤️

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      1. Sorry, if there was any delay in my reply. I was taking a quick shower and I found myself face to face with the deadliest, meanest, ornery cricket I ever did see.

        Yeah, I saw it. Your said it so subtly, not like me. That is why you and Gabriela are two of my favorites. Happy you plugged her book too. I am planning to do the same on Thursday.

        Now back to you, Yes, I survived the battle with the cricket. Oh, I said back to you. I love your poetry. Always have. Always will.

        Staying inspired during the challenges of this isolationism is not easy. Perhaps, I should ship you a palm tree.

        Rachel you are a talented poet. Don’t ever doubt yourself. Just know this, I know I don’t doubt you.
        ❤️

        P.S. Off to round two of Lonely Author and the biggest, baddest cricket you have ever seen.

        Hey don’t laugh. I am a big city kid.

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      2. Is it wrong that the idea of Lonely Author head to head in battle with the “deadliest, meanest, ornery cricket” makes me giggle a little? I mean, I don’t doubt that you’ll succeed in round two, but it does make me wonder exactly how round one went. Thank you, I needed that laugh.

        As for your compliments about my poetry, you have made my day. I needed that too, to be honest.

        Be sure to provide an update on the LA vs cricket saga.
        ♥️

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      3. Now, don’t get me wrong. If there were a damsel in distress here, i would have braved life and limb.

        Round two never happened.
        Jacob ate the combatant.

        Loved the poem.
        Going to bed.
        Have a wonderful end to your day.
        ❤😴

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  2. Very vivid and moving imagery. Absolutely gorgeous writing. Nice post for Gabriela too. My husband ordered our book today. We are both so excited too. This was a very kind gesture and no one will regret buying Gabriela work. I know it will get read many times. Have a blessed evening and stay safe. Love 💕 Joni

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    1. Thank you Joni, you are absolutely right, you could not regret buying G’s book, it is sensational. I plan to get a printed copy too, I need to hold those words in my hands.

      All the best to you my friend, you stay safe too xoxo

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  3. I’m a little too depleted to give this the words it deserves right now but I can’t help but love how you married spring and autumn together—merging our hemisphere and yours together. It is so intriguing how you are entering into fall while we are just emerging into spring.

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    1. ‘Depleted’… I’m sorry to hear that Larisa. I think this is a perfect word to describe how I feel too. I’ve struggled to write for this very reason. It’s harder to be able to do or perhaps see the things that might energise or inspire us at the moment. I hope you wake tomorrow feeling a little refreshed. Sending you hugs ♥️

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  4. You wove the seasons of change together superbly Rachel…. and when I see the mention of snowdrops, I think of Gina, our girl on the equator, and her love for the snow🤍❄💙 and I adored the finale >>
    “there’s an empty
    space among
    the falling leaves
    but my comfort is
    the snowdrops that you
    gift to me
    When I read your Spring”

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  5. Rachel, this is a superb poem. You are fabulous. An autumn that flows into a spring.; one hemisphere flowing into the other and vice-versa. Falling leaves and snowdrops (what an imagery!). The bridge between the two: the memories of Easters. And there is no “two.” Two becomes one: your magnificent talent, your beautiful verse, your longings.

    I’m left so hungry
    for the taste of
    long gone Easters..

    How splendid!

    Rachel, thank you from the bottom of my heart for your wonderful words. Thank you for your love and your friendship. That you for being the wonderful soul that you are. Thank you for writing these beautiful words about me. Thank you for the link to my book and my site. Thank you for being you.

    Yours always
    Gabriela

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    1. Dear G, all I can say is a thousand thank you’s to you. I love your interpretation of my poem so much

      “The bridge between the two: the memories of Easters. And there is no “two.” Two becomes one”

      Sigh. You made this poem much more beautiful with these words. Thank you. This poem followed our conversations about your poems, and your prompt…

      Your book is magnificent and I could not give it enough praise nor enough support. You are magnificent, and I could not give you enough praise nor enough support.

      I am working so if there is a delay in my replies that is why. Sending you love and hugs, and a winter rose in return for a summer one. Are the snowdrops out yet?
      Xoxoxo

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  6. “I read your spring
    while autumn leaves
    make skeletons
    that flutter in the branches
    of my lungs
    I’m left so hungry
    for the taste of
    long gone Easters,”

    Rachel, this one makes me ache and tingle.
    It’s ethereal and so beautiful, much like you. And makes me hope you get some belated/extra easter eggs. I feel like maybe you could use some. Even if that’s not the case, please know I wish all things spring-like and delicious upon you. You’re an amazing friend. Hugs and love. 🌷🗿🥚🍂💋💕🙏💛

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    1. Hey. This Is so strange as this comment does not show up in my notifications. Thank you so much for your wishes of things spring and delicious, and you saying I’m a good friend. Those things are like a fresh breeze on my soul. Exactly like your friendship. Thank you 😘🧡🌈🌱🍂 xoxoxo

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      1. Rachel, this trips me out to no end. I just saw your comment via my other blog name when I was over there for a sec. It was the same for me over here at LTP though. This comment doesn’t show and neither did at least one of your other ones to me. I’m sure it has nothing to do with us possibly being WP lab rats under some totalitarian rule that tries to divide and conquer genuine friendships thereby increasing senses of isolation and thus craving-for-more-likes… ;)) ;)) …so I’ll just chalk it up to “hmmm.” 🤓😉😆🤖Very happy we still manage to connect though. 🥰🙏💕🦾

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      2. You make me laugh “I’m sure it has nothing to do with us possibly being WP lab rats under some totalitarian rule that tries to divide and conquer genuine friendships”. But, can we be sure 🤣🤪😳😅. I hope they fix this problem though! Xoxox

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      3. Didn’t get this one either! No, we can not be sure. In fact often I feel it’s not such a laughing matter. 😭😳😬🥴😉 But in the words of many who went before us, “where there’s a will there’s a way,” …and “love wins.” Let’s keep finding each other my friend. xoxoxo

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  7. Melding the two hemispheres into one so very beautifully and yet those burnt out wishes and that empty space, fill one with an ache.
    My dear Rachel, your poems are truly worth waiting for! The loveliness of your verses leave me a bit teary-eyed.
    ❤️❤️
    Such lovely words for our immensely talented Gabriela! ❤️

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    1. Gosh, I’m floored if I leave you a bit teary eyed. Makes me feel a bit that way in response. You are such a wonderful friend and a completely fabulous writer.

      By the way, I’m not getting notifications for some of my comments, so I’m sorry I missed this. Hope you’re having a good week ♥️♥️

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      1. You are so welcome, Rachel. You have the rare gift of touching hearts with your words. ❤️❤️
        Yes, most of us seem to be facing problems with comments. They are not showing up in notifications. When I see a like there, I go hunting for the comment! WP!!!🙄
        Yes, it has been a reasonably good week, considering the circumstances! Hope you are well too. ❤️❤️

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      2. Ahhh that’s a rare gift you certainly possess!

        I feel like life in lockdown is highs and lows. Mostly I count myself at very fortunate but it can be a challenge at times, I feel very busy! ♥️♥️

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  8. You capture a beautiful back and forth between the longing of fall and the joy of spring, of looking at the chared colors and empty spaces and searching for the resurrection of spring and Easter. There is more depth to that than I can express in a comment. Truly a great poem.

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  9. So incredibly stunning. I have such admiration for you both. The beauty of your poetry rushes in and rages in spaces of the heart, as it frequents a flood of longing in the mind.

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  10. My favorite lines among others and the ending as well:

    “I breathed in –
    the burnt out wishes
    of the cinnamon
    and colours charred
    compared to yesterday”

    Such a captivating imagery the way you have a deep connection with the emotions and feelings in your heart is empowering and very moving.

    I’ve always been a big fan of your works and I’m always so proud of you and your ability in your writing.

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  11. You have an otherworldly talent for images. Your words always place me in the heart of the poem, where everything you’ve so wonderfully described finds itself in front of my mind’s eye.

    I’m also a huge fan of G’s poetry. I’ve read her work for two years now and I’m so happy for her success.

    Here’s wishing you both the best.

    Nitin

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  12. Dear Rachel!!your poem is gorgeous.some lines are most impressive”it seem there is empty space among falling leaves but my comfort is snowdrops that you gift to me when i read your spring”,marvellous,dear!!🌷

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  13. Rachel sweetheart for some reason I cannot reply to your latest comment on my blog. The one with the Tui song. It’s so beautiful. Thank you so much for sending it to me. I was listening to the song and the images of the little Rachel taking care of a little bird came to mind. You are unbelievable. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
    I am chasing after all nightingales’ songs to send them to you. All nightingales’ songs and plenty of love.
    xoxoxoxo
    G.
    I understand your challenges when it comes to working from home. But if there is anyone who can do that is YOU! I know this in my heart.

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    1. Argghh WordPress has a vendetta against us sometimes. I’m glad you loved the tui song. There is something about that distinctive sound that stirs my heart every time.

      Would you really chase after a nightingale sound for me. If you catch it, please send it to me.

      How are you? Have I missed a post? It feels like a while since I saw one. I’m going to check right now.

      Xoxoxo

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  14. OH! Rachel! LOVING that You wrote this piece of absolute beauty at a prompting from Beautiful Gabriela! How perfect. I gasped while reading this and often gasp at her poetry as well. Can’t stop smiling. Thank You! Huge hugs Your way…🤗❤️😊

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  15. So heartfelt and delicate. Truly tender and full of emotions. I love the way you use the imagery of autumn. Honoured to be reading this absolute work of exquisite compassion.🖤

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