Takes two

you
undress the metaphor of me
like i am your poem
and you are the eyes within my storm,
you read me
like you wrote me yourself
slowly and swiftly,
you run your mind
along the contours of my words
and find me between the lines
You divine the depths of me
and the paralells of us collide
Somehow stardust and consequences
aligned

we are like similes
you
and I

Image:
Milky Way over New Zealand, photography by Lukas Gallo

154 thoughts on “Takes two

    1. Well, I figured if weโ€™re going to get married, I should at least write you some poetry ๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚ (only half joking).

      In all seriousness, means the world you loved this April ๐Ÿฆข๐Ÿ–ค๐Ÿค

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      1. Wait, didn’t we… get married last night or was that merely the sweetest of dreams…? Speaking of which – I posted a song that was on repeat all morning. It was a grey day and I fell head first into it’s delicate heartache and harmonies. I think you’ll like it. Do listen if you have a chance โค

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  1. Took my breath away… “and you are the eyes within my storm, / you read me / like you wrote me yourself”…again, I feel I have lived or am living this poem… the question is, does one begin to write oneself again? Or does one allow oneself still to be written….

    Absolutely beautiful, friend ๐ŸŒช๐Ÿ‘โ€๐Ÿ—จโšก๏ธโœจ

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    1. Such good questions you ask here my friend – โ€œdoes one begin to write oneself again? Or does one allow oneself still to be writtenโ€ฆ.?โ€ I do not know. But itโ€™s an amazing feeling to be read (inside and out) by someone who truly sees and understands you. Thank you ๐Ÿ™โค๏ธ

      Gotta say, these emojis you used – basically, they sum up the entire poem. Iโ€™m impressed!! ๐ŸŒช๐Ÿ‘โ€๐Ÿ—จโšก๏ธโœจ

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      1. The feeling is mutual Rachel… and I think you deserve the title of most amazing comment-replier in my present known universe… so compassionate and conscientious… and complimentary. Thank you dear friend ๐Ÿ’œโšก๏ธ๐Ÿ”†

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      1. I was going to suggest โ€˜takes threeโ€™ or โ€˜Mรฉnage ร  troisโ€™ but I thought that might be an entirely different kind of poem ๐Ÿ˜‚. Hugs to you too lovely Nadine ๐Ÿ’“๐Ÿ’“๐Ÿ’“

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      2. โ€œThe more then merrier,โ€ as they say? Oh dear, I fear Iโ€™m getting too riskรฉe. ๐Ÿ˜‚ I sure hope no one takes it the wrong way. ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜†
        Hope you have/are having a lovely day. ๐Ÿ˜˜๐Ÿ˜‡๐ŸŒท

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  2. What a fabulous poem, Rachel… the eyes within your storms .. the contours of your words… he who wrote you…
    You brought me to my knees. From there your words contour my feelings. The beauty of that stardust outweighs any consequences. Let it be. Whatever it is, it’s gorgeous and your talent can move seas.
    Lots of hugs my dearest friend.

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    1. โ€œThe beauty of that stardust outweighs any consequences. Let it be.โ€ This G, I know you see my soul. If only I could move seas, or at least temporarily jump over them. My world would be a very different place. Hugs gratefully received and sent xoxo

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      1. You moved seas… time to find the answer in your silences. Actually you know the answer. I am sure you do.
        Ah, my dearest Rachel.. I guess I am still under the spell of your magnificent work.
        ๐ŸŒบ๐Ÿ’๐ŸŒธ๐Ÿ’œ

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  3. you never cease to amaze and surprise me. upon reading I felt like it was a person who woke up one day and saw her shadow or reflection and the image spoke to her. well that’s how this spoke to me. really good work.

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    1. If I never fail or cease to surprise you dear Gina then I am very happy – I think, because there is a lot to be said for consistency and predictability too! I love how youโ€™ve read this, exactly right, to finally see your reflection or shadow, a part of you that you hadnโ€™t seen before. Thank you.

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  4. How clever, and beautiful and so moving,
    and everything else others have said.
    I’ve probably said this before, but you, and a few other glorious writers like Yassy, your poetry is like balm in this abrasive world. ๐Ÿ’š

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  5. What an amazing year it has been reading your work, and writing with you. This poem too settles into a shelf of all those incredible works that I read over over and again by you. It’s so tender and beautiful. Thank you.

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  6. Oooh Rachel! You wanted me to miss this exquisite love metaphor, or is it a simile? Whatever it is this is such a sensual use of figures of speech. You leave me speechless, my dear friend! BEAUTIFUL โค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธ

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    1. Dear Punam, how lovely to see your graceful and generous words applied to my poetry!! Iโ€™ve missed you ๐Ÿค—. Iโ€™m so glad you enjoyed it, simile or metaphor or both! I didnโ€™t want you to feel obligated to catch up on reading, thatโ€™s all!! โค๏ธโค๏ธ

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      1. I have missed you too! ๐Ÿค— And I can’t tell you how good it feels to submerge myself in your wonderful words. There will never be any obligation ever to read your words. โค๏ธโค๏ธ

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  7. I forgot when I read this poem to give you a like and a comment, but anyhow here I am, reading the poem again, because I was playing this song tonight, and the words of your fabulous poem clicked into my mind, so without further ado, here’s the song from the incredible Lisa Hannigan, “Oh Undone” (Then I think you’ll understand why I remembered)

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    1. Dear Ivor. Somehow I missed some of the comments I had on this poem. I am so very sorry, thank you for sending me this fabulous song. I hope you are well, Iโ€™ve been less present on WordPress lately so apologies for being late to posts, not commenting as much xo

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      1. Rachel please don’t worry…I am also struggling with my blog commitments…what ever piece of feedback I receive is tucked under my pillow and warmly kissed during my dreams xxx

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      2. Hi Rachel, here’s my fav’ song this week, and under the present circumstances, it’s beautifully appropriate, and I play the tune at night just before my head hits my comfortable pillow……. to help sooth my soul…..

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    1. Drew. I am so happy you have a date. But, whatโ€™s this about not having a great day. Are you ok? Truth be told, Iโ€™ve been worrying about you, but I donโ€™t want to always be asking you, because I know that can be draining too. But, Iโ€™m going to go ahead and ask, because I care. Sending you love and hugs, many of them.

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      1. That feeling….. I wish I could take it from you. That feeling, where the illness feels like it creates a physical barrier between you and everyone else. Even when there are people there. Itโ€™s so fucking lonely Drew. I know that feeling, and i wish I could penetrate it for you.

        Your date is scheduled. From now on, take it hour by hour, day by day. Let people help and support you as much as they can. You will get through this, and I know how alone you feel but I also know how much you are loved.

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      2. Don’t get me wrong. I have good days too. On my bad days I stay away from blogging. Disappear for a day or too. That is why I arrive late at blog reading.

        But today my bad day is my regular blog day which made it more challenging.

        Trying to deal with it like you said day by day. I have no other choice.
        Thank you for listening. I really needed that. It means a lot. You are a special lady.
        I hope you never change. You may be broken, but it’s in such a beautiful way. โ™ฅ๏ธ

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      3. Drew, I am always happy to listen, it hurts my heart you are experiencing what you are going through. I wish I could do more…. please never hide away from me if you are having a bad day. Hopefully tomorrow will be one of your better days. Iโ€™m thinking of you โค๏ธ

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  8. I honestly read this so many times to just be able to pick my favourite lines…. But I’m sorry I just can’t…all of it, every single line deserves praise…. It’s so heartachingly beautiful… Thank you for this! And huge heartfelt thank you to the lonelyauthor who led me here.

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      1. I am smiling as I write this. May the world shine ever so brightly with all the blessings going round and round. What a sparkling light you are, Rachel! I am thrilled our paths crossed! Thank you, Drew!! xo

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  9. A beautiful poem, Rachel!
    Because of Lonely, you think of me as a Dream Catcher. Now, because of Lonely, I think of you as Kintsugi. I love the poem he dedicated to you. You are an Inspiring Woman of WordPress!
    Take care, and be well!

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    1. Resa, a catcher of dreams, Rachel, kintsugi. Part of why I felt so honored he dedicated that post was because of my admiration of the others (like you) that he has done the same for.

      Thank you Resa, and you take care and be well too.

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      1. xo
        I hope the best for Lonely. He’s got a great attitude for his situation.
        We have both been fortunate to have his light shining on us! We shall both be well!

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  10. “you read me
    like you wrote me yourself”
    I just can’t get over this! I love those moments in poetry where everything seems to stop and the artist seems to have turned into the art-form! Love this!

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  11. Wow! Beyond Awesome Rachel!!! Stunning! You are such a master of artistry and beauty!! I LOVED
    THIS POEM!! So elegant and delightfully sensuous and romantic too!! Mmmmm! Don’t mean to be a pest but I’m thinking this is my new favorite – and candidate for a recitation!! Are you really seriously considering writing with me? I read your words and I’m feeling
    maybe a little inadequate!!! Wow!! Brilliant!! Bellissimo, Rachel, Bellissimo!!
    Chuck
    xoxo
    ๐Ÿ˜˜๐Ÿ’•๐ŸŒน

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      1. No, My Dear!! I LOVED THIS POEM!!! It deserves All Caps OMG, are you serious, really? Maybe your most favorite poems? Jinx!! The best so far for me too!! It is so amazing, Rachel! Can you, Please, Please, pretty please with a cherry on top. Repost this with you audio of it?? (this is me begging.)

        Hope you’re, wait let me see if I can get it right, day yesterday was a good one and that you have a wonderful morning and day today! 7:30 a.m. there?? Getting ready to leave for work or already have? What is that you do, Rachel? What part of the country do you live in, north? South? Christchurch?
        You guys get earthquakes down there don’t you. I’m a California boy. We got lots of them through the years but I never lived through a big one – well the one in San Francisco in 1986 was felt in Sacramento a bit 80 some miles away. Made water in swimming pools splash around and buildings in downtown sway.

        Rachel, This poem really spoke to my heart and I’m guessing it was because you poured so much of
        your heart into it that it reaches out so easily and swiftly!! I’m so glad that your favorite moved me?? Maybe our collaborating could be a really good thing???
        Sunshine and Smiles, Rachel
        Chuck
        xoxo
        ๐Ÿ˜˜๐Ÿ’•๐ŸŒน

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      2. Thank you Chuck, yes the time difference is confusing. These days I only really make it to WordPress in my late ish evenings, which is middle of the night for the US I think. Yes, we do get earthquakes here, particularly Christchurch where there was a particularly devastating one in 2011.

        Iโ€™m glad my poem spoke to your heart and moved you. Thank you as always, hope you sleep well!
        xoxo

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      3. Dear Rachel,
        Just happened to notice something of importance that I want to pass along to You, because I care!! Not to be nitpicky.

        I love your poetry and want to make sure that everything you have and will write is properly protected as your personal property. I have noticed really just now on your favorite poem, that you are not publishing a copyright notice with your poems!! I know there is an inherent copyright in what you write once you write it, but there is a huge possibility for someone to claim that by posting/publishing your work without a copyright notice your work now belongs in the Public Domain and is free to anyone and everyone to do with it as they please. The thought of that for any of your works frightens me.

        So, would you please let me suggest – Strongly, that you start placing the following copyright notice
        on everything you do and go back to everything you have ever posted or published and put the following copyright notice on ever piece you’ve ever published? Please, Please – this is more than just begging, Rachel – it’s me being concerned for You and your words!
        Copyright (c) 2020 (use the date it was published the first time here) Rachel (should really use your full real name here, but you can use a pen name and then add this – All Rights Reserved

        If you look at the copyright notice of most major corporations this is the format they use. Good for them, good for us?

        Sorry to be intrusive, but I want to protect You and your intellectual property rights!!
        Chuck
        xoxo
        ๐Ÿ˜˜๐Ÿ˜˜๐Ÿ’•๐ŸŒน

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      4. I really appreciate this actually, because recently I discovered that this poem had been plagiarised and posted by another person, with a few words changed here and there. I did not address it formally, but I did feel very sad about what I considered a violation of the โ€˜community of WordPress spiritโ€™. The person removed the poem but never apologized or even acknowledged my communication I directed to them politely and privately about it. I should start putting this copyright notice on my work… I guess I just never thought anyone would bother to do that!

        Thank you for this suggestion, I may just take you up on it!
        xoxo

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      5. Just doing what friends do – watch out and care for each other – besides I think this was part of my job description as a cheerleader?? LOL So sorry to hear someone plagiarized your work, specifically this one, wow! Just goes to show you what a great writer you really are! Nobody does that unless it’s good! You need to believe me when I tell you that you are a wonderful writer and what you write is really, really good! Happy to hear that you are going to be putting copyright notices on your work – hope you do them all – over time – you can use the one I sent and just copy and paste. So, question?
        Are you going to use your real, full name and be brave and receive the praise you so richly deserve, or
        are you still going to hide from your fans with a pen name? Just curious? Ha!

        I have fallen in love with this poem, Rachel!!! How can anyone not!!! Mmm!
        Hope you have a wonderful Saturday – anything fun planned?
        Sunshine and smiles, My Dear!
        Chuck
        xoxo
        ๐Ÿ˜˜๐Ÿ’•๐ŸŒน๐ŸŒน

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      6. Isn’t late ish evening for you, say 9 p.m. there 5 a.m. here? Seems you have a very busy, full life? What is it that you do that keeps exhausting you? I’ve heard it said there are more sheep than people in NZ? What is the geography where you are. NZ has a lot of different ones? Flat, Flat and semi arid here near Austin TX. Do you get to take road trips on the weekends? Those are always fun.
        Have a happy Saturday!!
        Smiles,
        Chuck
        xoxo
        ๐Ÿ˜˜๐Ÿ’•๐ŸŒน๐ŸŒน

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